Homecoming (Warriors/kittypet FF)

[Yonk]

~Epilouge~

"Race you to the river!" A small tan and white kit bounded from their human's porch and into the yard. He was followed by another male and a female. The male was a dark brownish,and the girl was black with amber eyes. The brown one and the tan one had green eyes.

"I'll win!" Shouted the brown one. "Not if your all muddy!" The girl laughed as they bounded through the tall grass of the meadow across the street. The street was never busy. The young brown boy looked puzzled. "Muddy?"

His sister tackled him,pushing him into a mud puddle. "Hey!" He shouted. She laughed and ran faster,passing the tan and white boy. She jumped,bouncing off the tree. "I win!" She shouted,grinning.

"Shadow,you always win!" whined the tan one as he caught up,panting. The brown one,now dripping and smeared with mud,Came up last,lapping at his muddy pelt. "Yea,and you cheated!"

"Aw,dont be a baby,Elfen!" She rolled her eyes at her dirty brother. He snorted. They played in the shallows a bit before heading home,trotting across the street. A loud rumbling filled the air and oddly, A large truck barreled twords them.

"Run!" the tan one shreiked. "Rodger that,toaster!" shouted EWlfen,and they barreled to the other side. But their sister stayed,immobilized,staring at the monster barreling twords her. The two boys,on the other side,turned and started shouting.

She screamed as the truck raced over where she had been. All than was left was a few tufts of fur. "She must've got caught on the wheel...." Toaster whispered. Elfen nodded stiffly,knowing he'd never see his sister again. both boys felt tears run down their face at the realization that their dear sister was now dead.

[Everest]

((Omg I was like, "They're adorable!" and then she died and I was like "What?! Oh no!" Such a rush of emotions, I like it!))

[Evr]

((alittle bit tostraight forward but ilikeit :3)

[Yonk]

~Chapter 1~
Life without her

((Point of view by toaster.))

1 year later....
I woke from my nap in my home,standing and stretching out. I yawned and jumped from my spot atop the cabinets down onto the counter,and than down again onto the floor. The soft green carpet pushed against my paws.

I had dreamed about her again,and how we used to play together. Oh,I missed her so much. I stopped to lap at my tan and white side,and looked around. "Elfen? Where are you,bro?" I called. But it was strangely quite.

The humans had gone to do something outside. The dog was with them. Where could he be? Since she'd died,they never did much,anyway....

I was bowled over by a streak of brown. Flailing my paws,my green eyes widened and I looked up to find Elfen,him and his odd, sharply pointed ears. They weren't rounded like mine or hers.

"I got you,bro." He laughed. I rolled and he tumbled to the floor,and I pinned him. Both our tails were waving in excitement."No,I got you." I replied,grinning. He laughed.

"Okay,okay,off me chubs. Gosh,you really need to lose a few pounds." He said,Standing. I frowned. "Its fluff!" I exclaimed. I could tell that he didn't buy it.

"Why don't we go out? We're the only males who havn't been pokered yet,lets look for some girls." He grinned. I nodded,smiling,And we bounded to the door together.

It was made of this clear stuff that screeched when we clawed it. I meowed for the humans and clawed at the clear stuff. One stood from it's spot and walked over,Sliding it open. We both stepped outside and pulled our tails away when she rolled it closed. We jumped up over the new fence and looked over at the grave. Cars now barreled across. I shut my eyes tightly and looked away. I could tell my brother did too.

Walking along the tops of the fences to ignore the neighbors dogs,we made our way along. We spotted a white female at the edge of the woods,just across the street. We jumped down,looking across to her. She looked strange,thin and underfed. We called to her. She turned with a look of shock and froze as we bounded over,careful of the monsters.

"I'm toaster. Who a--" I broke off and took a step back when the girl turned to face us. She was missing an eye,and both ears. Her face held many scars. Elfen looked at her.

"Your scared too!" she exclaimed. "N-No,just a bit surprised." I said.

"Okay,so maybe it was a little bit of a lie. She looked like a ghost,that white pelt gleaming in the sunshine. But life without....her,Well,I needed another female in my life now. Another girl to count on and keep safe. Because I hate life without her.

[Yonk]

~Chapter 2~
((Point of veiw by Elfen.))

Slowly,Slowly,toaster and I coaxed the girl to tell us her name.

"G-Ghostface." The girl stuttered frightfully.

"Calm down,ghostie." Toaster said. I could see my brother instantly regretted it,but it actually seemed to lift her spirits a bit. I shrugged. "So,What bring you here?"

"I'm hunting. I'm from the cla--" She froze. "Oh my...I shouldn't even....be talking...talking to...t-to you..." She slowly backed away and ran off. My brother's face fell as she ran off into the forest.

I could tell he was thinking of shadow. He wouldn't even speak her name anymore. It pained me to see toaster this way,but I couldn't stop his sorrow. I turned. "Dont worry,We'll find us an un-fixed female. Cross my heart." I said,but I didn't face him. I couldn't. I knew what I'd see if I did.

And it would break my heart.

"C'mon,bro. Lets go to tallpost path. It always has the prettiest females." I turned,And all to late realized what I'd done. I Watched my brother clench his teeth,taking deep breaths. he dug his claws into the ground,and tried to keep back all of the bad memories. He cried.

I did what needed to be done. Nowadays,this is what happened when a female left him without a goodbye. Anybody,really. "Goodbye,bro. see you later." I knew my brother understood. So I trotted alone,to tallpost path.

((It seems short to me...it probably is,I lack insperation. sorreh.))

[Yonk]

~Chapter three~
Who am I?

(told in the view of a mystery character)

I trotted down the street.

Who am I? ......You don't need to know my name,or why I've come to this street,just that I'm here,and I'm to tell this part.
Thank you.

I trotted down the street. Now,mind you,this is a very desolate street. Bot many cars,but alot of strays. There is a certain group of strays,called RIH.

You needn't need to know what that stands for either,just that I am a part of it.

I slowly stalked along. My pelt was heavy with mid and leaves. I always tell the others that if you are seeked,you should find a disguise quickly. A mud puddle and a pile of leaves work just fine.

The only feature you can not hide is your eyes,but its a blessing that mine were such a common color,a deep amber.
I Ducked lower,pressing myself close to the curb. There were pawsteps,coming. Someone rounded the corner....

I Exhaled deeply. A minor,patrolling. Idiot. Slowly,I continued to creep forwards,towards the un-patrolled territory. Kittypet territory. Swallowing hard,I knew what was awaiting me there. But I must do my duty as a leader.

I must find a suitable mate for myself,and have children. Of course,this is no requirement,but I feel I must give something to the....clan--yes,it is a clan--and new children this coming spring would be perfect.

I creeped closer and closer,passing the fence,further still.....Yes,I must do this,for my future.

So now,dear readers,I must bid the farewell. I Hope y-
Somebody tripped on me. "Who are you!?"

[Boxer]

(YAYZ~!)

[Everest]

((Very good, keep up the good work!!!
Don't mean to be mean or whatever, but I did notice a few grammar and spelling issues and things that should simply be worded a bit differently. Otherwise I really like it! For that last chapter, you could have written that a bit differently where you give just as much information, or lack that of, but in a more natural way that doesn't require the character directly talking to the audience. I mean then again, if you do want that, that's fine. Totally your preference. I'm just giving a few suggestions.
If you want me to PM you with examples of your grammar and spelling stuff or ways of changing that last chapter, I can. Otherwise, keep up the good work!))

[Yonk]

((Thanks!
She's supposed to be talking to the audience....In a sense they all are telling their own story,In different ways. Toaster with a life without shadow,Elfen dealing with toaster,and this new character looking for a mate undercover. As for grammar and spelling...I was probably tired.))